Legendborn is the first book in a proposed YA modern fantasy trilogy, following Bree Matthews, a sixteen-year-old high school student who gets into a live-in program at the University of North Carolina. After being attacked by a supernatural creature at a party, she resists Selwyn Kane’s Mesmer, or him erasing her memory. Unable to move on while knowing this information, she finds a way in through her peer counselor, Nick Davis. She proceeds to infiltrate a secret society, while incidentally realizing that she had been mesmered once before, in relation to her mother’s death. Armed with questions and seeking answers, Bree delves into a whole new plane of life.
Now, with such a compelling premise, it was slower a read than expected, mostly due to the egregiously long ‘tutorial stage’. The ‘tutorial stage’ is the segment in the beginning portion of fantasy books, especially ones where the MC is dropped in from a mundane life, where the mechanics and laws of supernatural elements are explained so that the reader can follow the plot. In Legendborn, this lasts for half the book. The actual time spent explaining is just fine, it’s the incredibly pointless romance between Bree and Nick that bloats it so. It turns what could have been gotten through in a fifth of the book into half. While their chemistry and banter are natural and entertaining, it doesn’t change the fact that their relationship is oddly placed and disruptive to the pacing.
To elaborate on that, the romantic subplot detracts from every character’s development, the rich and deep lore that comes with the world, and the main plot itself. Deoni introduces many concepts, such as the different magical societies, or that the scions being awakened cuts their lives short, go underexplored for the sake of another scene where Nick and Bree flirt, or Sel threatens her. Bree herself also suffers from it, losing out on expanding on the promising dynamics between her and her family and friends. All that is left out to establish a love triangle between Bree and the two boys. That could be excused if there was anything unique about the romantic subplots, but it’s a tired repeat of the trope. An exceptional girl who is destined to save the world must choose between the human version of a golden retriever and the most petulant edgelord to ever grace the page. It’s a shame because the platonic relationshi[s and setting are full of potential that went underutilized in the first book. I still hold out hope for when the second comes out.
This would be best for younger teens, who haven’t seen the same relationship play out in two dozen other series before. It’s not a bad or unpleasant dynamic, and Deoni does well with it, but I fount that it detracts from the plot threads where her ideas really shine.